Monday, 29 September 2008

Season 2-Chapter 5:"Peter's uncle"

Hi everybody! Here I am, with a new chapter of the story I'm writing. In the last chapter, Peter told Claire that his father had been a murderer and that he had killed Kate. Peter didn't know his father was a murderer, so Claire believed him. But then, Ricky, who's Peter's uncle, phones Peter. Then, they entered Claire's house. Now...chapter 5!

Claire and Peter had already entered to the house.
-"Sit down and I'll bring ice cream. It's OK for you?"-asked Claire.
-"Sure"-answered Peter.
Peter was waiting for Claire in the living-room and Claire went to the kitchen.
-"Hi mum!"
-"Hi dear. How was school? Any news?"-asked Claire's mum.
-"Look: while Peter and I were walking, Peter's uncle phoned him. His name was Ricky"-told Claire.
-"So what?"-answered her mum.
-"Don't you see it? Ricky could take revenge on us! Because of me, Peter's father died"-told Claire.
-"Well, we'll discuss it later. Go with your boyfriend, he's waiting for you. Go."-said Claire's mum.
Claire smiled.
-"Well...here I come with the most delicious ice cream ever. Home-made!"said Claire.
-"Mmm...thanks Claire"-said Peter and kissed his girlfriend.
-"At what time are you leaving? Because your uncle phoned you, and..."said Claire.
-"Don't worry. Is not something important. I nearly never see my uncle, so I don't know him so much. But, well...he's my uncle after all."told Peter.
Peter knew Claire was worried. So he asked her:
-"What's wrong?"
Claire looked at him. Then, she said:
-"Your uncle, he worries me. Your father was a murderer and...what if he is one and wants to take revenge on me? Because of me, your father died. I mean, I was just defending myself. He wanted to kill me!".
Peter didn't answer. He was thinking.
-"Look, he isn't like that. He's good guy. I know: we can all have dinner together tonight so you can meet him. Agree?"-said Peter.
-"Ok. Great."said Claire.

What will happen when at the dinner? Hope you liked the chapter. Stay tuned because new chapters will come!

3 comments:

Nadine said...

Hiya Steph
Thanks for the wonderful comment, and I rate your blog 150%!
Lovely... I am so scared, I hope all will go alright with Claire, and I wonder if Ricky is really a murderer after all.
Keep me tuned, I cannot wait for the next chapter!!! I'm biting my fingernails...
Kisses, Miss you, Nadine

Zawan said...

hi, I loved the dialogue, and i know it's not easy coming up with a story that makes readers want to read the next chapter
very good story
but some advice: why don't you use more adjectives to describe things to make it more interesting
very good story though...
cheers!

Meghna said...

Hi stephie....Loved this [part and I'd agree with zawan's advice....just give it a try to make the story more interesting...eagerly waiting for the next part!